May be the only thing that is worst than good-bye is not having a chance to say it.
How beautiful! I love this statement.
To bid good-bye is not easy,
It’s the toughest thing to do.
What hurts even more is,
I couldn’t tell this to you.
Memories of yesterday,
Beautiful and bright.
Its all dark now,
For You’re no-where in sight.
Up above the sky,
You found a new home.
Where Gods reside
And angels like you roam.
Remains of you here,
Deep inside my heart,
Keep me sound and alive,
For souls never part.
It rains as if you shed your tears for me,
If happy you are, colorful rainbow I see.
This is in honor to all the love we shared,
Waiting for the doom from which I was spared.
13 responses so far ↓
Namrata // October 13, 2008 at 10:35 am |
Awesome poem!
Aniket // October 13, 2008 at 11:13 am |
It’s really good. But at one or two places, the rhyme seems to me to be out of place. I’d say try letting go of rhyme once. But maybe that’s just me.
Good work, keep writing
Kulbir Saini // October 13, 2008 at 12:00 pm |
nice one …
Devansh Mittal // October 13, 2008 at 12:08 pm |
Nice one …
Deepti // October 13, 2008 at 12:29 pm |
M speechless! Truly Amazing!
Divya // October 13, 2008 at 2:14 pm |
Bagundi…chaaala bagundi
satya // October 13, 2008 at 3:59 pm |
good one .. but as aniket said, at some places it was kinda awkward .. really good though!
Abhishek Sainani // October 13, 2008 at 4:59 pm |
Wow… the rhyme looks so natural and obvious. You always have rhyming in your poems and yet it looks consistent and obvious… Personally, I have a hard time rhyming two lines.
By the way, theme of the poem is good.
prateekgv // October 14, 2008 at 3:15 am |
Nice
bharatambati // October 14, 2008 at 8:04 am |
Nice one.
“It rains as if you shed your tears for me,” idi kummesindi…
srirang // October 14, 2008 at 4:24 pm |
nice one … keep writing ..
Anupama // October 15, 2008 at 4:34 pm |
@Aniket
Rhyme is the only attraction my poems have,according to me
I don’t use rich vocab and neither do I blog on exciting to pics.
Will surely try to write one as you suggested.
Special thanks for the honest comment.
How do I send these to mag?
@all
Thank you!
Aniket // October 15, 2008 at 5:35 pm |
Hmm.
Actually I have a different idea while attempting to write poetry. I lay stress on the idea, and try to keep the language as ‘tight’ as possible, meaning not a word more, not a word less. And I also take care not to give my own opinion, but try to ‘lead’ the reader to the opinion by stating some facts objectively.
Hehe how far am I able to do this is open to discussion
Just wanted to tell you all this. And don’t downplay your poetry by talking like that, your ideas are admirable 
. Vaise toh we all have miles to go before we can be satisfied 
Vaise I personally don’t like rhyme unless in a song, or poems which are written to be made into songs (like Sainani’s) so maybe I’m forcing my opinion on you. Pardon me if you think so. And please mail your poems to me to submit them to the mag.